Monday, May 17, 2010

Can u improve this sentence for me plz?

i want to sell a painting in the ebay, and english is not my native language. can u improve the comments i have written about it plz?


''This 60cm*60cm outstanding handmade painting is kind of a Persian Art called ‘Miniyator’. The style of this painting is very similar to the style of Persian carpets. This specific painting took about 5 months to be completed. The whole painting has many stages. First the basic style should be drawn. there are some coping and pasting on the pasteboard. The colors for this paiting are natural colors made by hand. It has some distinguished parts which are covered by gold papers. The flowers in the paiting are very small and took months to be completed. This beautiful painting will fit any luxurial house.''


* sorry for all the mistakes!

Can u improve this sentence for me plz?
Is the painting watercolor, oil or acrylic?





This original "Miniyator" ____ painting, 60 x 60 cm, was designed to fit into luxury homes. Miniyator is a style of art that simulates Persian carpeting. This piece took five months to compelte having been built in stages. The desgin was first created combining drawing, pasting and copying onto pasteboard. The natural colors are handmade. The tiny flowers took months to complete. Gold papers accentuate special areas.
Reply:the only real problem I can find is that you should have used an x instead of a * for the dimensions! Other than that just run spell check. You did a great job, your description is better than you think! Oh on second look you might change the ending to " will make a nice addition to any luxurious home" instead of "will fit any luxurious house"

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