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im writing a report on Nevada and need to know if this is good. It will say look here for pics but there on a cologe so these are just words...














Nevada








The state of Nevada was claimed as the 36th state on October 31, 1864.Thats when it became an official state. Nevada’s nicknames are Sagebrush State, Battle Born State, and the most known nickname is the Silver State. The meaning of the name of our state “Nevada” is snow-capped in Spanish. Here are some facts about Nevada; the population is about 1,998,257 people. It’s the 35th largest state (2000 census). Nevada’s Capital is Carson City. The state bird is the Mountain Bluebird and the state animal is the Desert Bighorn. The state flower is Sagebrush and the state tree is Single-leaf Pinon and the Bristlecone Pine. Our state precious gemstone is the Virgin Valley Black Fire Opal. The state song is Home Means Nevada.





Home means Nevada, Home means the hills. Home means the sage and the pine. Out by the Truckee’s silvery rills. Out where the sun always shines. There is the land that I love the best, fairer than all I can see. Right in the heart of the golden West, Home means Nevada to me.





Our state colors or silver and blue. And the state flag has a green reef looking type of thing on it with yellow flowers. Its says Nevada under a white star. Above the white star there is a scroll saying battle born. The background color of the flag is navy blue.


Our states motto is “all for our country.”








Here is a picture of what our state looks like,


Here is a picture of Carson city, our capital.














Nevada is the home of the wild mustangs, which is one of my favorite things about the state.











Nevada is bordered by Utah,Arazona,California,Oregon, and Idaho.








Here is a timeline of dates that are important to


Nevada.














• 1821 Mexico claimed the area after a successful revolt against Spain.


• 1840's Americans on the way to California traveled through the region.


• 1848 Nevada was part of the area ceded by Mexico to the United States.


• 1849 The first non-Indian settlement was made at Mormon Station (Genoa).


• 1850 When Utah Territory was organized, almost all of present-day Nevada was included except the southern tip, which was then part of the New Mexico Territory.


• 1859 The Comstock Lode of gold and silver was discovered at Virginia City, and many miners began coming from California.


• 1861 Congress created Nevada Territory. In 1862 the territory was enlarged by shifting the eastern boundary.


• 1863 Nevada became a state. In 1866 and 1867 more eastern land was gained from Utah Territory and the southern tip was acquired from Arizona Territory.


• 1880 - 1890 As the Comstock Lode declined, the state's population fell from 62,000 to 47,000.


• 1900 The discovery of silver at Tonopah, soon followed by gold strikes at Goldfield and the discovery of copper at Ely, led to a new mining boom that lasted until after World War I.








Those are some very important history dates of Nevada.








Here are all the cities in Nevada


Alamo


Town Lincoln


Amargosa Valley





Arden





Ash Springs





Austin





Baker





Battle Mountain





Beatty





Beowawe





Blue Diamond


CDP


Clark


Boulder City


City





Bunkerville


CDP Clark


Cal-Nev-Ari


CDP Clark


Caliente





Carlin





Carson City


City


CDP smallest CDP in the state


Cold Springs





Crescent Valley





Crystal





Crystal Bay





Dayton





Delamar Ghost Town





Denio





Duckwater





Dyer





East





Ely





Elko





Empire





Enterprise


Town


Clark





Eureka





Fallon





Fernley





Gabbs





Gardnervillle


Town





Gardnerville Ranchos





Genoa


Town





Gerlach





Glenbrook





Glendale


CDP Clark


Golden Valley





Goldfield





Goodsprings


CDP Clark


Hawthorne





Henderson


City Clark


Hiko





Imlay





Incline Village





Indian Hills





Indian Springs


CDP


Town


Clark


Jackpot





Jarbidge





Jean





Jiggs





Johnson Lane





Kingsbury





Las Vegas


City Clark


Lamoille





Laughlin





Lemmon Valley





Logandale


Town Clark


Lovelock





Lund





McDermitt





McGill





Mesquite


City Clark


Minden


Town





Moapa Town


CDP Clark


Moapa Valley


CDP Clark


Montello





Mount Charleston


CDP Clark


Nixon





North Las Vegas


City Clark


Orovada





Overton


Town Clark


Owyhee





Pahrump


Nye





Panaca





Paradise





Paradise Valley





Pioche





Primm


Clark


Rachel





Reno


City Washoe





Round Hill Village





Round Mountain





Sandy Valley


CDP Clark


Schurz





Searchlight


CDP Clark


Silver Peak





Silver City





Silver Springs





Sloan


CDP Clark


Smith





Spanish Springs





Sparks


City Washoe





Spring Creek





Spring Valley


CDP


Town Clark





Stateline





Summerlin South


CDP


Town Clark





Sun Valley





Sunrise Manor


CDP


Town Clark





Sutcliffe





Tonopah





Tuscarora





Verdi





Virginia City





Wadsworth





Wellington





Wells





West Wendover





Winnemucca





Whitney


CDP


Town Clark





Winchester


CDP


Town Clark





Yerington





Zephyr Cove











Nevada has a lot of beautiful scenery look here.


One thing you guys might know about Nevada, is Sarah Winnemucca. This is what the wikipedia says about her in the first paragraph, Sarah Winnemucca (born Thocmentony, Paiute: Shell Flower )which is now western Nevada… (ca. 1841 – October 17, 1891) was notable for being the first Native American woman known to secure a copyright and to publish in the English language. She was also known by her married name, Sarah Winnemucca Hopkins, under which she was published. Her book, Life Among the Paiutes: Their Wrongs and Claims, is an autobiographical account of her people during their first forty years of contact with explorers and settlers.


Sarah was a person of two worlds. At the time of her birth her people had only very limited contact with Euro-Americans; however she spent much of her adult life in white society. Like many people of two worlds, she may be judged harshly in both contexts. Many Paiutes view her as a collaborator who helped the U.S. Army kill her people. Modern historians view her book as an important primary source, but one that is deliberately misleading in many instances. Despite this, Sarah has received much positive attention recently for her activism. She was inducted into the Nevada Writers Hall of Fame in 1993, and in 2005 a statue of her was added to the National Statuary Hall Collection in the U.S. Capitol.


That says a lot about her. Sarah Winnemucca is very well known for bringing peace between Americans and Indians. Nevada is well known for her. Because she was born in what is now western Nevada. She is now in the Nevada hall of fame.








Nevada is apart of the Great Basin desert. You can see many miles of beautiful mountains, sagebrush, animals, and so much more!!! Nevada has one of the lowest average rainfalls out of the fifty states: nine inches. You may have heard the poem Mountains as Islands which says the following,





Mountains as Islands


Each range here is like a warship standing on its own, and the Great Basin is an ocean of loose sediment with these mountain ranges standing in it as if they were members of a fleet without precedent, assembled at Guam to assault Japan. Some of the ranges are forty miles long, others a hundred, a hundred and fifty. They point generally north. The basins that separate them-ten and fifteen miles wide-will run on for fifty, a hundred, two hundred and fifty miles with lone, daisy-petalled windmills standing over sage and wild rye. …Discounting the cry of the occasional bird, the wailing of a pack of coyotes, silence-a great spatial silence- is pure in the Basin and Range. It is a soundless immensity with mountains in it.


-John McPhee


Basin and Range, 1980

Is this and A paper????
I can't read it all, but from what I skimmed it seems like you're just bulleting. Try listing in more creative ways.
Reply:Okay, I have to admit, I got half way down..... skipped some, read some more... then skipped some.





Work on your orginization and grammar. Other than that, I can imagine writing about Nevada wasn't very exciting (As it wasn't very exciting for any of us to read) but Good Job!!
Reply:a report on nevada or something
Reply:To be honest, right now it is not a A paper. But it can be. Just a twiking with the words, spell check and a little bit more interesting facts about Neveda. right now it is a high C or Low B. depending on what grade your in.
Reply:This is a good paper, especially for 4th grade. But ways to improve would be to "shortlist" the points. I.E. cut down on the bullet points, and dont list them as bullet points. Explain them each in a sentence and explain about them.





Also, at the end end with "to conclude," or "in conclusion" and sum up the paper and the point you are making in writing the paper, and the most important bit of your conclusion, your opinion!





GOOD LUCK!





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Reply:You have a lot of spelling and grammar errors that would preclude you from getting an A. Also, this reads like you simply copied information from a bunch of books or from the Internet. Nothing original.





It's a weak C paper at best.
Reply:This paper has alot of interesting ideas, but you have to put them into complete thoughts. I just seems like a rumbling on of ideas. Make it more like a story. Choose some of the most important things that stood out to you and expound on them.
Reply:It just looks like random stats.. hard to read, very unorganized! %26gt;.%26lt;
Reply:I didn't read the whole thing but what I did read was actually pretty good! I really liked. I would grade it as a B or an A.
Reply:What grade is this for?
Reply:sorrry i fell asleep
Reply:You really need to find someone to edit this. There are typos, spelling mistakes, and grammatical errors everywhere. Here are a few things you should never do in formal writing.





-Use personal pronouns.


-Use multiple exclamation points.


-Use wikipedia as a source.


-Create lists of irrelevant information.
Reply:As a substitute I would think you have to do a bit more work.





Please specify why those people or places are important %26amp; what roles they did.
Reply:I thought it was a little labored. You have to lose yourself in the moment and loosen up.
Reply:I'm surprised you think someone would read that whole thing.
Reply:Based upon spelling, grammar, and sentence structure, I would have to say it is not going to get you an "A".
Reply:Good Job, it's really good. You could get an A- or an A on it. Depending on your teachers view. I would give you an A-.





If your in grade 7+ you will get something above 85% for sure
Reply:C- Try to pull your facts together a little more...
Reply:It would depend on the course and grade level. There is too much summary and not enough of your own analysis. Try breaking it up into more paragraphs, too.





Do not create such large lists, either. Good luck!
Reply:GOOD JOB ITS GREAT