Girls only, How do you rate this love note?

I'm going to give my gf a paper flower and a not with it that says this,





"This flower represents my love for you, Unlike all other flowers this will not die, my love for you will not die, this flower will last as long as you let it, our love will last as long as we let it, this flower may look simple but there a lot more to it, our love may look simple but there a hole lot more to it, even if you were to throw this flower away the memorie of it will last in my heart forever, even if we were to throw our love away the memorie of you would last in my heart forever you mean the world to me, aways %26amp; forever yours..





What you think ladies?

Girls only, How do you rate this love note?
I think its lovely - I would be over the moon to get that from my beloved!
Reply:its very romantic, but umm u kinda repeat yourself...like you have a stuttering problem or something
Reply:that is soo cute!! hope she enjoys it!!! good luck
Reply:That's lovely, just spell memory properly and change hole to whole and you're sorted!





What a romantic bloke you are, I hope she appreciates you.





;)
Reply:Uh... it's sweet and the intention is good, but honestly (and i'm all about honesty) EVERYONE compares women and love to flowers. If you want to REALLY knock her socks off think of something else that's beautiful and enduring. You'll get points for originality, nothing any other guy writes for her will compare, and your note will stand out in her mind as different for a long time to come. I.M. me if you want suggestions or just forget I said anything and go for the gold!





Good luck with the "wooing"!
Reply:Try this. Pretty much the same as what you wrote. A few edits to make it flow a bit better and some spelling corrections. Please read and see it was done with good intentions.





"This flower is a symbol to represent my love for you. Unlike all other flowers this one will not die as my love for you will not die. This flower will last as long as you protect it. Our love will last as long as we let it. Although this flower may look simple there is more than meets the eye as is the case with our love.There is a whole lot more to it. More than my heart can express. Even if you were to throw this flower away the memory of it will last in my heart forever. Even if we were to throw our love away the memory of you would be imprinted in my heart forever. You mean the world to me, always %26amp; forever yours..





It is really sweet i'm sure she will love it!
Reply:2 b truthful I don't like how it repeats like will not die will not die, it needs to be more smoother, maybe you could add stronger adjectives????
Reply:Hmmm.....first of all, use spell check so you look smart and loving : )


I think saying "our love will last as long as we let it" sounds a little off. How about "I will work hard to keep our love fresh and new and try to make each day with you the best it can be." Something about putting effort into it would be good.
Reply:If he could spell certain words correctly it might make a difference.





At least I assume it is from a fellow.
Reply:awwwwhhhhhhh bless thats soooo cuttee :)
Reply:You go boy! Mr smoothie, it depends on how romantic your girl is but I'm sure she'll like it!
Reply:good job
Reply:sweet, romantic, touching...just what a women wants.
Reply:i think its sweet.... but paper flower? hmmm try searching a teddy flower :P hard but try to find it... would be cute
Reply:You are a wonderful boyfriend. I think the sentiment is beautiful and if it were given to me, I'd never, ever forget it and the paper flower. I'm thinking it is worded so beautifully it doesn't need to be this long. You really said it all at the beginning, so why not end it after "...our love will last as long as we let it." She's lucky to have you!
Reply:soppy but sweet
Reply:10/10 vvery romantic
Reply:10 OUT OF 10
Reply:I think it is very sweet, as long as you have been seeing this girl for quite awhile. You don't want to scare her away by coming on too strong, too soon.





Before you give it to her though, I would strongly recommend fixing the spelling, syntax and grammatical errors (i.e.: "whole, not "hole." Also, that entire note is one, long, run on sentence).





Girls love an intelligent guy.





Good luck!
Reply:Its beautiful,i rate it 10/10


and i think u'll melt her heart when she reads it!
Reply:u got me
Reply:I think any time a man writes a heartfelt love note, it's a good thing.
Reply:Hey if you was my bf i'd be over the moon. What a lucky girl.
Reply:omg THAT was SO sweet i hope ur gf enjoys it !!
Reply:YOU ARE SO SWEET!!!
Reply:I think its very romantic and if your g/f doesnt like it then she must be mad. My husband would never think of something like that and weve been married nearly ten yrs.Thats really sweet and your g/freinds lucky to have someone so caring, loving and thoughtfull. :-)





GOOD LUCK!!!
Reply:I like the content. To make it flow better and seem more poetic, make each new thought a sentence on a new line. I know it's hard to do that on Yahoo! answers.
Reply:The whole paper flower idea sounds cute....however the note itself I'll give you an 8/10. Why 8. First of all the confidence you had to post the note on-line and hear what random people think about it....next would be on a not so positive note it makes you sound like a bit of a stalker...and then you need to spell check...overall it's cute though.
Reply:you're not getting laid with that note.


Some girls might like it but i'd go with something with a slighlty more raw edge, a little dirty.
Reply:Hi,


well its a bit over the top for my taste, I would run a mile! You need to check your spelling as that would look like you did not care/are not educated and just scribbled in haste. Also look at the punctuation... Is this meant to be a big time declaration of love? Will she be up for that? Perhaps you speak to her all the time like this, if so, that's cool.... good luck with the note...what colour is the flower?...I wonder...
Reply:i think it is very sweet.it shows she loves you but if it was plastic you know, she might be giving u a hint... but still very sweet i would give it a 10/10